My boys love to bake with me and our handheld mixer recently stopped working, or rather, worked as it pleased in a possessed sort of manner! Needless to say, it found its way to the recycling and I just today picked up a new one. Every time I see it newly unpacked, locked and loaded, waiting for the next inspired youngster, I can't help but chuckle. As a child myself, I loved spending time in the kitchen with my mother, cooking meals, baking, washing dishes, I wanted to be in the thick of it all. We were baking together one day and the mixer wouldn't work. We're trying to figure it out and, being an older home, someone checks the breaker to no avail. As we continue to troubleshoot, I remember that with this type of mixer, if the attachments are not clipped in it will not function. So I grab both mixer parts in one hand, the mixer in the other and give a good push. While I'm thinking I certainly must have found the solution, my mother had been doing her own troubleshooting and gave the cord an extra push into the socket, just to be sure. She found the solution. And I found myself a new problem, fingers all jammed and twisted. We laughed so hard for hours. It really reaffirms how important this time spent in the kitchen with my boys is.
I'm looking at the second half of this story, which I would define as a story within a story!
Trigger: Wanting to bake with your children
Problem: Handmixer stopped working
Quest: To find a way to make it work so you can continue baking
Resolution: Mother and daughter pushing from both "ends" of the mixer ending in twisted fingers and laughter.
Purpose: Remembering how important time together with your children is!
Emily - great insight - it is a story within a story. Or a story within her on-going narrative about baking as a way to bond with family, where she shares the narrative, then a specific example of it to bring the concept to life. Depending on the design outcome for sharing this story, I'd cut all the beginning stuff and start with the hand-mixer breaking down. Though it can seem harsh, most people don't care about all the back story and just want to cut to the chase. Or - start with the breakdown - then weave in the part about why baking together is so important.
I almost deleted that chunk at the beginning because I knew this would be the feedback. But yet, I couldn't make myself cut it out!
What sweet and funny memories!
trigger: broken handheld mixer
problem: When the thing that brings family together breaks, thus threatening family time
quest: Figuring out how to fix the mixer, so family time can continue
resolution: the journey of fixing the mixer became a valued and memorable part of family time itself
purpose: spending time with family